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| chickens 2008-04-29 ch 1, anon. | abusekayla. amazing. beautiful. i HEART it!! (: |
| hime1221 2008-03-19 ch 6,  | abuseWonderful, but I would have liked more action, but I'm sure its coming soon! There are a few spelling errors, but not so major that I can't read past. Keep up the excellent work! X--hime1221 |
| hime1221 2008-03-11 ch 5, | abuseLove the medicine! Not the provocative content so much though. That I could do without, but you seem to be very good about censoring it! If it stays at this level I could tolerate it; but that's just my opinion! Post soon PLEASE! X--hime1221 |
| hime1221 2008-03-11 ch 4, | abuseOne of the slower chapters thus far...but it keeps the story moving forward, and that's all I care about. The cursing is not so appealing to me, but I can see where it's neccesary to portray the character's different personalities! Nice job! X--hime1221 |
| hime1221 2008-03-11 ch 3, | abuseBest ending of any chapter by far! Love the medical stuff again! And did i ever mention that I love the name 'Kelura'? Well I do! X--hime1221 |
| hime1221 2008-03-11 ch 2, | abuseWonderful second chapter! Really gets you hooked on the story! Nice closing line as well! X--hime1221 |
| hime1221 2008-03-11 ch 1, | abuseRock On! This is an AWESOME story! I love the way the sentennces are written! I've read all the other chapters and I absolutely adore them. I will be reviewing all of the other chapters and any other chapters you post if the story remains as engaging as it has thus as as i am sure it will. X--hime1221 |
| Silverterror 2008-02-12 ch 1, anon. | abuseWhoa! Is that copyright thing at the bottom real, and serious? |
| shootingstar89 2007-12-28 ch 1, | abusewow, interesting story. I think using third person might bring more people into it. I like the details and descriptions. good job! |