Descriptions of such scenes, murder scenes, in particular, scenes involving blood and knives and deep cuts, are becoming trite and insipid. Moreover you didn't do a good job in conjuring graphic images of the murder. It was all very plain and simple, to tell the truth. While fragmented sentences are employed by many modern writers nowadays, using them in excess can be an eyesore. If you're going to write on something that is cliche, make sure it stands out. In this case, I'm sorry but it doesn't. Give the plot an original twist, insert uncommon/different elements, or rely on the wings of language to weave an original, picturesque description.

Lovely work. The description is quite beautiful. I like the title. Nice work. :)

~Twilight Starr~