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| starlit x sky 2008-05-14 ch 6,  | abuseAww! That was a very, very good short story. I liked Loralee's little rant to Noel (it was Loralee who was on the phone to him, wasn't it?) Anyway, great story! |
| starlit x sky 2008-05-14 ch 3, | abuseI like Euston. And I don't like spiders. Garfield the spider. Haha nice. Anyway, good chapter. I liked this bit: "and they straighten their hair in the bathroom when it says specifically not to do so near water – and yet, they are scared of a spider." hehe. |
| starlit x sky 2008-05-14 ch 2, | abuseI like the little 'poems' you have at the beginning of each POV. I feel sorry for Jackson, Noel is pretty mean. I think Noel's POV did sound like a guy. Good chapter |
| starlit x sky 2008-05-14 ch 1, | abuseOh, this sounds good. I like it so far. |
| LiMay 2008-04-30 ch 6, | abuseLOVED IT! x) louis sounds so adorable AH! the perfect man! |
| Jeya! 2008-03-09 ch 6, anon. | abuseGood Job! A Short and sweet story, BraVO!! :) |
| Rayne 2008-03-08 ch 5, anon. | abuseAhahahaha Zomg I laughed 'til i cried when Elise was talking about laundry in this chapter. I love this story. |
| AgamiMuffin 2008-02-29 ch 6, | abuseloved it! i like long stories n all but i actually kinda liked that this was so short but not too one-shot ish, very sweet, there was a full length long story here but only in 6 chappies which i loved. The fact she (im assuming here) just had sex with him so suddenly after being so hesitant about it before was a bit...fast i guess, but still Very very cute story overall, very sweet, loved. |
| blackbubbleblue 2008-02-29 ch 6, | abuseHello, Great chapter! Don't like the alternative ending though. If you had done that I would of had to kill you. WHY is there no more Do you mind I ask my self thank you very much. I am NEVER talking to you again. (That won't last and you know it) Great chapter anyways. |
| Saamii 2008-02-28 ch 6, | abusemushy endings are always wonderful. good quotes from 'becoming jane', i just watched it and james mcavoy is gorgeous. |
| crazy fruit 2008-02-28 ch 6, anon. | abuseGr! No mroe ever -sob- but why? Also as funny as that other ending would have been Amy I would have had to kill you if you used it insted. I loveded it so much. See you at school your crazy friend. |
| The Real Batgirl 2008-02-27 ch 6, | abuse*breaks into sobs* NO! Heath Ledger died right after finishing Dark Knight...not Spiderman! It was a beautiful story until that. Psh, Spiderman is NOTHING compared to Batman. Anyways, I loved it, if you're going to go through and re-edit it, I suggest adding more detail to the scene, characters, and a touch more backround information. Awesome story! |
| Oooh.Look.A Cat 2008-02-27 ch 6, | abuseyay elaine for convincing you not to write that alternative lol GO ELAINE!! hahaa as for the chapter mushy but oh so CUTE =] and i'm adding this to my favourites BUT i've reviewed so woot do i get some form of prize? perhaps a SURprize? lol laters izzie |
| jenjen-0 2008-02-27 ch 6, | abuseAw, cute ending. Maybe an epilogue? ALthough I must say, that alternate ending does sound really good too... |
| hypa to hell and back 2008-02-27 ch 1, | abusehey really good start this sems fun ill read the rest when i get home from school i could really enjoy this hehe |