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| FoxyWriter 2008-01-25 ch 1,  | abusewow - I love the imagination here :o I could see everything happening as I read - very good ^__^ However, there was a small problem with the dialogue; it was kind of run-on. Normally when a different character speaks, it begins on a new line, rather than in the same paragraph. But that's a minor error - easy to correct. Everything else flows very nicely, and I do hope you continue this someday ^_^ ~FoxyWriter |