that was really good. keep writing you amazing author that will take over the world one day... whoops - did i say that? well anyways keep writing and keep up the good, no not good.. GREAT work!

omg loved it. i still think you need a little work on going from one time to the next, but its really good. you are definately more of a movie type story writer... we could have so much fun making this into a movie in the future. =D
love ya!

That was so dumb! Everything happened in a matter of hours, and a cauldron killed the daughter? This had the potential to go somewhere, but you completely ruined it by this chapter.