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| Chasmodai Blue 2008-08-16 ch 3,  | abuseSecond person. Good second person. I really liked it, actually. It wasn't awkward (and at no point did I want to scream, 'NO I DIDN'T!'), which is often an unfortunate side-effect of second person fiction. You did a marvelous job, man. That characters were believable and the feelings were easy to relate to. Kudos, my friend. |
| plumblossom 2008-05-08 ch 1, | abuseWhat I like is that the narrator is so confused and _young_. (emotionally) This makes anything possible! I mean I really don't know what's going to happen to this guys, or what they're going to do. Usually 2nd-person doesn't work, but it seems to work here, which is also interesting. |
| <3 2008-03-25 ch 3, anon. | abuseWay to go. I love this story, and this pairing is amazing. |
| nomy 2008-02-02 ch 3, | abusei enjoyed it so much!! if you want to do a sequel make sure i know about it!...its quite cute the way you do the S&M thing..it is what you intended right?..cause somebody wrote and i read somewhere in a story, that the truly master in the S&M play is actually the M..as the M enjoyed what the S gives so that means who control who if you really think hard about it.. okk..back to the review of the story..i do enjoyed this one..i sure hope want to know what happen next to Jesse and Dominic.. |
| Kaybug150 2008-01-28 ch 3, | abuseThis is an absolutely wonderful story. The writing was beautiful, and it was slash, which I love. I'm sorry to see it end. |
| Rumorunderoath 2008-01-23 ch 2, | abuseaw! this chapter is so much sweeter than the other one. I love this one the most! good job!! |
| KayLee77 2008-01-05 ch 2, | abuseIt's strange, because even though you write using "you" I can still completely separate everything. It's almost like getting a very in depth look into someone's mind where you're almost thinking in unison. Anyway, I love it. It jerked my heart a little and that's what makes a great story. - Kay |
| cherryd22 2008-01-04 ch 2, | abuseI like this story a lot. Can't wait for more! |
| Sekre 2008-01-04 ch 2, | abuseCan't wait to read the last part. Beautiful story. |
| Kaybug150 2008-01-03 ch 2, | abuseYour writing is absolutely beautiful. I hope you write and post the next part very soon. |
| KayLee77 2007-12-29 ch 1, | abuseSo, I've never actually read a story, of any kind for that matter, that's used "you" instead of "he, she, they, or I." Honestly, I never thought I'd like something written like that either, but you've completely proven me wrong. I don't review often, but I couldn't not. Beautifully written, I tip my hat to you. - Kay |
| We're not working out 2007-12-13 ch 1, | abuseFor what it's worth I thought this was amazing, even if you just left it at that for a one shot. But I will be checking back for more. -WNWO |