That was a really good story. I liked it. I'm gonna check out if you have any other stories. This is a bit of a suggestion, but you should be a writer. I'm not saying that you should quit your dayjob, or anything. I'm just suggesting that during a bit of your spare times that you have, you should write. I was practically clinging to this story. Nice. _

Hey Willum- This your first R-Rated Horror, and its one of the originals that are the best. Its kind of sad to go through all the old stories because I know most of these people don't write anymore.

alan is a depressive little sh** isnt he? _ Cool story, cool ending, just... cool. (and i completely agree with you statement ...wondering why you come up with this kida sh**... i get the same thing for stuff i write)

It was twisted... and I like twisted. Twisted is my thing. Well, that and humor. Especially twisted humor. Anywho, this story was cool.

That was so subtle it killed. Unbelievable the way you can do these things. It took me almost half the story to figure out what was going on, but once I got it, everything clicked. Nice work.

So now I'm on the Twilight Zone/Creepshow factor... yay!... Hmm, who is the most annoying up that could be cast as Alan? :-)

Good story. Now I'm wondering if I wrote this review because of the last line in your personal info...

Good intro. Good train of events. Characterization fits perfectly with plot.

" "Did you ever think about capping your partner and just taking off?" " The only trouble with that is that he's not telling him to do it, like he did with the other two examples, just asking if he did. Perhaps if you worked in; "Well you should." (?)

Otherwise a flawless story. Love the ending. :)

This story is very sick and twisted. Great job! I loved it.

Strange. Twisted. I liked it.

If your trying to write then your doing a bad job of it.

I can empathise with the guy. Everyone seems to have those thoughts running throught their heads sometimes. Though not always that blatant. Wonder if he ever uses the popualar insult 'blow me' could be interesting. Very good original storyline.

Hey, Will. Cool story. I like the way Alan didn't know he had the power, makes it all the more enjoyable. And ya know, now that I've read this, you got me thinking...;)

A nice short story. Allan has got some interesting power, and I would like to see you expand on this.

Hi there Willum! Who knows why we think the things we do, but I wouldn't worry unless you were going to act on them... Anyway, it's an interesting story, and probably a VERY good thing that Alan's unaware of his power, it makes me shudder to think of it! (And, by the way, I don't mind being called SE, people used to use it all the time during my IRC days:)

This story is Ok. Did you have a bad day? Sometimes we wonder why you think of this stuff.