The sky is crying stars.
I really liked this description; imagery, perhaps, or just the straightforward, but tasteful way it was said.

Lines I liked:
gravity's greedy clutches as it presses it to its heart.
Orion, Cassiopeia, Lyra, Leo and Gemini losing their pieces, dropping arms and heads and belts like statues crumbling from decay.
The distant suns meant to be immortal, are dying one by one in short bursts. Their existence sacrificed for our momentary pleasure.
Pretty much any part of it that provided visual imagery stimulus.

before blnking
Blinking is missing an i.

Being the way I interpret things, I saw a lot more meaning to the last one/two lines. Mostly the first; it could be applied to other areas.

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turns of phrase that i liked:

soaked by inky blackness
gravity's greedy clutches as it presses it to its heart
hover lightly, twinkly brightly

not so good:

fluid and streaking like water - redundant
the stars come close but never quite touch - redundant
stunning jewels of the heavens - feels too hackneyed
Their existence sacrificed for our momentary pleasure - i would just word this differently; "their existence" sounds jarring and doesn't fit with the tone of the paragraph.

i enjoy reading this kind of writing; consider choosing topics that are a little more off-beat.

Very pretty! (: I adore stars, so I basically drank all the descriptions in.

I love the phrase 'The sky is crying stars'. It reminds me of mythology for some reason, and brings up the question of why it should be crying them. How were they formed in the first place? You can probably even make up a whole story about this. (Haha, I'm weird.)

'kissing the earth' is very dreamy, too. I never thought of falling stars that way.

'swallowing this moment with our eyes' - reminds me of me when I finally got a look at stars over vacation. =P

For 'twinkly brightly', I'd change it to 'twinkling'. Isn't 'twinkly' an adjective?

Also, the sentence 'kissing the earth before blnking out one by one they soar downward and dissapear' confused me a little. Maybe try to separate this a little: 'kissing the earth before blinking out, one by one, they soar downward and disappear'. A very minor change.

Overall, wonderful description. (:

It makes you sad for a pair of shoes. Wow. Very well described with all the worn parts of the shoes. I really can't anything wrong with it except for a little misspelling. I hope you write more of these scenes for practice.

It really makes you think. Like what it there were no stars anymore? I guess new ones are made or something or they're is just so many it doesn't really matter how many fall. Great metaphors stuff and beautiful writing. The last line especially.