Great job at describing a poor, tormented soul. "Layed" should be "laid". Nice work. You've successfully made me feel sorry for Judine. Keep writing!

Good luck with writing, this story, and life. Have a lovely day and a wonderful summer.

~Twilight Starr~

well done, if a little cliche. has that "been there" etc. feeling to it. would be refreshing if you perhaps did something with a similar feel and tone, but mix it up a little. make the girl perfect in every way. make the girl a boy, an adult.

not entirely sure, however, that this belongs in horror. nothing particularly shaking about it.

Very well written piece. Flowed nicely, and the character was believable. No specific spelling or grammar errors. I liked it. I think an extension, of even just a few chapters, would be nice. The most beneficial, and obvious plot would be for Judine to give into the other's commands. But of course if you can think of a more original twist, it would also liven it up.