I love choka's in school we studied them for two years and learned how to read them in chines ahh there beautiful i recommend them.

it's very sweet and thanks for showing me a new format. choka i'll have to remember that. Is it something from Austrilia bc i've never heard of it here in the US.

Thank you.

Awesome poem, do you practice? It was nice, and cute.

This is so sweet and tender. I liked "to hold and kiss your heart". I thought that was such a unique way to express how much you care and worship this person, and wish to care for them. It's truly beautiful.

Art.

Aw.. this was sweet and lonely feeling. But the hope in the final line makes it all ok. Nicely done one of your best I dare say.

~Jackie

Very beautiful and it gives the greatest of feelings.

I like this Choka alot better then anything else in that style, brings out more meaning and thought. Great work.

Maggot.

Very peaceful and serene. Flows well with the sincerity. Good write. MD:77.

How you use so little a piece to get across so big a message is beyond me.
And how you used a love poem such as this without sounding clichéd...My goodness!
The flow is pretty amazing, too, as is the word choice.
(I'm envious now.)

great job girl. I really loved the ending. Keep up the good work.
Mandi~4~life

Beautiful poem. I really liked it. Was very peaceful and well written.

Good job!

~QueenVixta

Thanks for the review...usually i prefer rhyme...but i do like this...your line breaks are interesting. Where to chokas come from? ive never seen the style before...until our paths cross again

Michael

nice spacing from 3rd to 4th line
good work!

This is very interesting. I have never read a choka before and I must say that my first reading of one was very pleasant with your's. Everything seems to fit together with a high affinity for the other; the words just seem to weave into each other with no difficulty. Great work.