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| Black Owl 666 66 2008-05-18 ch 1,  | abuseAwesome poem, do you practice? It was nice, and cute. |
| Artemis Reborn 2008-03-21 ch 1, | abuseThis is so sweet and tender. I liked "to hold and kiss your heart". I thought that was such a unique way to express how much you care and worship this person, and wish to care for them. It's truly beautiful. Art. |
| the Stranger in the moonlig... 2008-01-31 ch 1, | abuseAw.. this was sweet and lonely feeling. But the hope in the final line makes it all ok. Nicely done one of your best I dare say. ~Jackie |
| Autumn Reflections 2008-01-28 ch 1, | abuseVery beautiful and it gives the greatest of feelings. |
| Maggot Blood 2008-01-07 ch 1, | abuseI like this Choka alot better then anything else in that style, brings out more meaning and thought. Great work. Maggot. |
| Moondog Dozier 2007-12-27 ch 1, | abuseVery peaceful and serene. Flows well with the sincerity. Good write. MD:77. |
| Blissfully Sarcastic 2007-12-26 ch 1, | abuseHow you use so little a piece to get across so big a message is beyond me. And how you used a love poem such as this without sounding clichéd...My goodness! The flow is pretty amazing, too, as is the word choice. (I'm envious now.) |
| loversdream17 2007-12-23 ch 1, | abusegreat job girl. I really loved the ending. Keep up the good work. Mandi~4~life |
| QueenVixta 2007-12-21 ch 1, | abuseBeautiful poem. I really liked it. Was very peaceful and well written. Good job! ~QueenVixta |
| Michael l'oeil fol 2007-12-19 ch 1, | abuseThanks for the review...usually i prefer rhyme...but i do like this...your line breaks are interesting. Where to chokas come from? ive never seen the style before...until our paths cross again Michael |
| subliminalsquirrel 2007-12-18 ch 1, | abusenice spacing from 3rd to 4th line good work! |
| Julian Laverne 2007-12-17 ch 1, | abuseThis is very interesting. I have never read a choka before and I must say that my first reading of one was very pleasant with your's. Everything seems to fit together with a high affinity for the other; the words just seem to weave into each other with no difficulty. Great work. |
| disneydork 2007-12-16 ch 1, | abuseThat was great! That was really good! Can't WAIT until you write more! |
| Julius Gillian 2007-12-16 ch 1, | abuseA wonderful wonderful heart warming choka! I learned something new today :) |
| Basara 2007-12-16 ch 1, | abusea sweet piece of gush hopes for better future... nice... |