Reviews for around the corner and behind the garbage cans

Reviews For: around the corner and behind the garbage cans

Kyllorac 2008-03-28 ch 1,	abuse"dancing in the rain. Iloveyousomuch Just not like that." - This section struck me as a bit awkward. I think starting a new line at "Iloveyousomuch" would help it flow better. "yet the teardrops are tattooed on your heart." My favorite line. Very nice use of alliteration, and I really enjoyed the mental image it evoked for me. "trying not to cry because I you loved me." A random "I" hopped in, it seems. "And still I torture myself, wondering if I had pretended to be queer what things would be like now." - I love how you off-set "pretended" by giving it it's own line. Very effective. The stanzas are well-organized, and the imagery plain but effective. The title really caught my eye, as well. Overall, I quite enjoyed reading this.
Lost in A World of Pain 2007-12-18 ch 1,	abuseHey there, first off, I am SO sorry for not being online or reviewing anything for SO long. Exams and life happened, as I'm sure you are so well aware. But, enough rambling. The poem. This was a lot more raw than other poems of yours that I have read. Many questions arise in the mind of the reader and a sympathy is generated towards the writer or main character being depicted in the poem. The writing style flows smoothly and, as mentioned is raw with emotion. Very well put and I can't help but think that the last two lines in italics are the best of the poem. Many would disagree I think, but for me they are the most profound, because a child is then sent to a shrink who is struggling with their own lives and can't even help themselves yet now they have to help you. Well written! I hope to be able to be online more and read more of your work! Cheers Lost in A World of Pain
Ashelin 2007-12-18 ch 1,	abuse"Ignoring the ignored." That is a powerful line. This is an amazing poem, horribly sad, but wonderful still. It has so much emotion and is just so real. This is how poetry is supposed to be.
Yoroy 2007-12-18 ch 1,	abuseMy my. Another kid like me. I must say we seem rampant like this today. The form and the poem are fine, the idea is bordering great. The only problems I come across are the random capitalizations, which I find are more annoying than anything else, and the words that have no spaces. other than that a really beautiful work of art.
perpetual questions 2007-12-16 ch 1,	abuseIt would be stupid for me to pretend that I have any idea what to say. I'm just... so sorry.

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