It doesn't really catch me, I must admit :( Sorry. I miss the flow - maybe you'll see what I mean if you read it out load for yourself? (this is not a flame or me trying to be evil, cruel or anything else... I'm trying to contribute to all writers, seing as constructive critisism is a great tool to get better at this writing game :) ) Good luck. Although I must admit that your story about the boy who is blind and has killed his girlfriend, seems like an interesting idea- especially with the 60 word chapters :D