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| simpleplan13 2008-01-27 ch 1,  | abuseShort, but powerful piece... the word choice is really amazing and I love the ending... beautiful job The first two lines seemed odd though... I feel like corrupt should either be corruption or corrupts, but not corrupt.. unless I'm missing the meaning somehow Anyway again awesome write PS If your bored today check out the Review Game's Review Marathon.. there's a link in my profile |
| Matthew James Current 2008-01-14 ch 1, | abuseVery different feel from your other work. It seems like this has more emotional undercurrents behind it. Short, but powerful in its message. I am again suprised by the raw potential you seem to have. Again, I encourage you to keep writing. It seems my earlier reviews of your rhymed works were.. inadequate. That style held you back from expressing this increased punch which your free-from works seem to have. |
| Luminous Night 2008-01-08 ch 1, | abuse...this reminds of myself... Awesome. |
| Katrina Zeffirelli 2008-01-04 ch 1, | abuseWow. Amazing as always! |
| Maralie 2007-12-17 ch 1, | abuseThat's very sad. I could relate. Keep on writing. |