Short, but powerful piece... the word choice is really amazing and I love the ending... beautiful job

The first two lines seemed odd though... I feel like corrupt should either be corruption or corrupts, but not corrupt.. unless I'm missing the meaning somehow

Anyway again awesome write

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Very different feel from your other work. It seems like this has more emotional undercurrents behind it. Short, but powerful in its message. I am again suprised by the raw potential you seem to have. Again, I encourage you to keep writing. It seems my earlier reviews of your rhymed works were.. inadequate. That style held you back from expressing this increased punch which your free-from works seem to have.

...this reminds of myself... Awesome.

Wow. Amazing as always!

That's very sad. I could relate. Keep on writing.