 Nemonus 2007-12-17 . chapter 1Interesting. I thought that the beginning was the cliche 'cute poem about fairies', but the end, especially details like "werewolves keeping watch/to scare the ghosts away" add detail and unique-ness to the fantasy realm you describe. Decent work. Good rhythm, although this one could do with periods at the end of the stanzas because each one describes something different. |