good god! but the girl in ch 10 is echo?? i just read all the chapters!! and they re wonderful! keep the work up

i'm sorry but i can't realy read this story. i'm only on the third chapter and i'm just finding it too fake. and the grammer is so bad. IT'S CALLED A COMMER = ,. see. this main character is supposedly really smart, pretty, a martial art master, ANd has won awards for singing? it's just too fake. i love mary-sues but only realistic ones. it's annoying!

I AM SO CONFUSED RIGHT NOW!

and who the hell is this triplet,stalker ECHO?!

same w/ this one.. can i plz save ur stories to read em...

kind of hard to follow with all of the mistakes but i like it soo far..its late so i cant finish it tonight but im excited to find out what happens! :)

its a good story plot. but maybe you should edit everything because there were alot of grammar and spelling mistakes, and you left out some words. its pretty funny that she has those kind of pjs, and keep up the good work
cant wait 2 read the next chap.
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hey,sweet story!!

hey... as always it's cute... but there are still alot of errors, I know that I said I'd edit it for you but I haven't had much of a chance yet... I promise I'll get there soon!

nice story

ahh! i cant w8 4 da nex ch!! ^^

once again good ideas here... but I couldn't help but notice quite a few gramatical and spelling errors... would you like me to edit this for you? I could make corrections in red or something and email it to you... oh, and another thing, you obviously know tons about martial arts, but it seems like you are explaining way too much about it, because your readers probablly won't understand even if you do explain... plus the explinations make me feel like I'm an idiot for not understanding in the first place... oh... ONE more thing... What's the purpose of having the list of Martial arts? I don't think you should include it... this is fiction, not an essay

she seems too perfect

nice story ^^

Do you need some one to edit for you?

I really like the idea... Your story has ALOT of potential... but, as you said the grammar, punctuation, and spelling isn't the best... I'd like to see more to this!