can't wait for the next chapter! u should post more often

Ah...interesting...I wanna see how this develops...

I love it! Keep writing!! =D
~Starry

i like it so far, but going back and forth from maya to cedric's point of view is a little confusing and hard to read. however, i understand this is not your intention for the whole entire story, and i look forword to more!

I absolutely love the idea for the story, and setting up a background is a good plan. This sounds really promising, and while I don't really swear a lot or anything, I hang around boys Cedric's age, they do cuss something awful. So anyway I think in the dialogue they should...and since it is Cedric narrating maybe he should too. Can't wait to get more into the story!

Overall, this really isn't a bad summary. If you can get depth into the Cedric character and make him out to be more than just a blow off preppy (or whatever you choose him to be)guy then it'll really make the story stand out. Also, emphasizing her problems with commitment (again, whatever you choose her problems to be) AND making Cedric aware of it (either gradually he figure it out and then confronts her, ect. or she breaks and just up front tells him eventually, of course) will help develop their relationship. I think that that scene--where he finally figures it out or she just tells him--will be a critical point in the plot and will most likely make your story or break it.
Again, I'm not sure what your intentions are and where you really want to go with it, but best of luck.
Might I suggest that Cedric and Maya eventually have a date where she takes him out to see the "grungy" part of the city or at least somewhere representing the people/culture that he's never been. It would open them up to eachother more, develop the relationship.

I look forward to reading this story, but I am a little afraid that this story is going to end up in the big pile of bad cliche stories. I have read many stories that have the same sort of plot (a guy living with a girl, them falling in love, etc.) that are very bad. Don't let your story become one of those.
Good luck!

I'm really excited for this whole thing! Sounds really cool and fun! (I'm a total romantic!) Adding this story to my Alert & Favorite Story List!! OMG! :)

hm... sounds like it's gonna be good... I hope you update really soon!

Although teh story sounds quite interesting, the premise upon which it is based appears to be doomed to failure: it just seems like too much of a stretch, pulling the rock-star thing. Besides, the rock star is generally percieved as the villian, or false hero, and reversing the order of things without being subtle about it and not allowing the reader to guess your intentions will prevent the optimum intrest level that every writer wants.