Hey!

Terrific story you have here, the plot is intriguing. I also like how you put the prologue before the first chapter.

Your description of Mirai is interesting, okay that's a place holder I'll rephrase, she's a character that we can relate to at certain points of the story.

Good Job, and Good Luck with your writing.

Kaiyako K.

it's almost like you want to torture the short people...

Anyway, another great chapter!! Confusing, but that's always normal...I hope...

UPDATE!

first, your characters make me feel short...
I'M ONLY 5'2''!*Crys*

Other then my feeling of insignificance in size...
i really enjoyed the chapter! Very well written and great sentence structure!!
Amazing!!

UPDATE! I will try to!

hia there^^ u wanna thank you for reading my story!
I wanted actually just to say that i have changed my ending of the first chap and the WHOLE of the second so if you wanna read it again its going now to go at a very more steady pace^^
but then when this was my only intention of telling you i stared getting into this storyXD lol
and i like it^^ alot
you must continue^^
tnx for reading mine and pllz consider re reading^^
tnx

I love it so far. It's really well written, and I can't wait for the plot to finally start rolling.

The only thing that irks me is the fact that you keep bolding important words. It would be a lot better if you used italics instead of bolded words. They make the reading quite hard, because they distract too much.

Otherwise, everything was perfect. I hope you'll update soon *hint, hint*.

So this is very interesting, and I dearly hope to see more of it.

I absolutely adore the way this was written, it reminds me of my own style in many ways.

I can't find anything wrong with this to be honest, it's very clear and very well written. It's descriptive and paints a very vivid mental image. It's compelling and leaves, at least me, yearning to know more.

It's rare I find things I like as much as I liked this anymore; kudos and I hope to see more of this very soon.