Interesting. You seem to be very good at leaving an impact that is intellectual more than emotional. Or at least that's what I get from this poem. Mind you this is a highly subjective observation, as I focus my work more towards emotional impact on the reader. But judging from what I've read so far, you seem to craft poems that make the reader think actively. At least more so than I would be expecting.

Good work here, I liked it. Especially the line "Encased in a feeble body / Like a cage of rusting ore." Very intriguing read.

Do I really need to say? Amazing. Just- again- wow.

Good poem. Write on.

~Anna~