Left me feeling a little sad and hopeless, as well as lonely. As always, nice adjectives. lol Umm... Not to be picky (hehe) but where you say "Holding firm, to cheat deaths menacing grip…", you might want to add an apostrophe so it's "death's". But aside from that, another poem leaving me hungry for more!

--Finwe

Interesting piece. Great job on description.

~Twilight Starr~

Very nice work here. You crafted this one meticulously it seems. This style lends itself better to your words coming through clearly, and it's very pleasant to see that you have a variety of styles that you write in! You craft your metaphors well in this piece, and capture your meaning well too.

As far as criticism for this piece goes, I would submit that it seems like your diction could be blended a little more smoothly into your lines. Sometimes you use words that are, to most readers, unfamiliar and they seem to stick out a little bit. I would say this isn't a weakness in your work, so much as something everyone struggles with at one point or another. More specifically, it's difficult to find one's own poetic voice amidst the clamour of different styles of writing and one's fellow authors.

Keep at it, be patient, and keep writing. The few small things I saw that could be improved in this are nothing more than stepping stones in your journey as an artist. You have skill at expressing yourself, keep working with that skill to refine and hone it. It's a pleasure to see your mind at work in your words.

And you wrote this all from the word "Hollow". Wow, you got talent. (I really am jealous.)

That's amazing how you can take a single word and turn it into something as beautiful as that. You're an amazing writer. Thanks for the review, by the way!

Absolutey awesome. I could picture it in my head. Just... wow!!

hmm...
interesting.

Amazing! I'm very impressed how you took one word and weaved an entire poem around it. Good job!

Interesting read. Why the word "Hollow" though?

Amazing, REALLY REALLY amazing! It is very powerful...