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| fusionbeam 2008-08-30 ch 6,  | abuseread this a while back this chapter i'll admit youyou snuck it by what i was expecting so whats the next story coming and the summoner you gonna rm that? |
| White Night Fantasy 2008-08-14 ch 6, | abuseThe ending made me chuckle. I just read the whole story in one go and really enjoyed it. Odd situations you put your characters into. I can't really blame Tern for having more than one personality there lol Great job with it :) |
| For What Its Worth 2008-04-27 ch 4, | abuseMy, oh my. Kidnapped in the very palace? How very...irresponsible. ..of the king. What major disaster subverted the guards, watchful servants, courtiers, any merchants that were not in on the plot? THough it does make it more exciting. Tern's dillemma with his wives, while immensely humorous, is starting to become stale...No offence intended. But the focus should probably shift to something else. Like, perhaps, a daring escape consisting of trickery, betrayal, a large display of princely swordplay, the intelligent brat saving everyone, and getting lost in the middle of nowhere with absolutely no idea where they are? That would be fun. *drifts off into her daydreams as another enemy falls, gushing blood...* ;) |
| Casey Drake 2008-04-18 ch 4, | abuseUy, he is in trouble. Physically, AND emotionally. I can't WAIT to see what happens next! :) CD |
| fusionbeam 2008-04-14 ch 4, | abusejust a question but what is her ultimate goal the god child? |
| Casey Drake 2008-01-30 ch 3, | abuseOh my, ANOTHER woman to deal with? Or you could have the 'nurse' be a eunuch, to save Tern some grief. :) CD |
| Lerene 2008-01-22 ch 3, | abuseThis is a very interesting story. I have never read anything like it before. I like it. I can't wait to read more. |
| Sammy Marsh 2008-01-16 ch 1, | abuseExcellent story! Good dialogue and emotion. Setting could use a little help though. Describe the surroundings. Where are they in the castle, for the wedding? |
| fusionbeam 2008-01-08 ch 2, | abuseinteresting yet slightly disturbing funny combination |
| undo 2007-12-30 ch 2, | abusewhat are they teaching that girl? its a great story, and I can't wait for the next update, but wow! what a cunning little brat. Tern better watch his back with this one! |
| Casey Drake 2007-12-28 ch 2, | abuseThere is something seriously wrong with Amalie. But the story's interesting. :) CD |
| shadowc 2007-12-28 ch 2, | abuse...Yeah, I've got to agree. He's doomed, but it makes an interesting story to read. Keep it up dude, and update soon. Oh, don't forget your others either, we've been waiting a while for those. |
| shadowc 2007-12-19 ch 1, | abuseNice, very nice. A good little piece of humor. And it seems like you guys characters always havep another "person" living in their mind, but that's cool. Is this being continued, or is it a one-shot? And are your other stories being updated soon as well? Still, as always, keep up the good work, and update soon! |
| SammyLi 2007-12-18 ch 1, | abuseoh this is very interesting and funny! Please continue! |
| undo 2007-12-18 ch 1, | abuseomg. this is hilarious! update soon! |