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| marilllove 2008-03-28 ch 1,  | abuseBeautifully written. My only suggestion is to try to shorten the first and third line, to keep a better rhythm to the poem |
| Fan Fan 2007-12-21 ch 1, | abuseThis work is very simple in wording, but carries a most down to earth feel and that's what makes it irresistable :) beautiful |
| simpleplan13 2007-12-19 ch 1, | abusevery sweet and a great concept... I love the second line... the only this is why is all but two lines double spaced? PS thanks for the reviews! |
| Artemis Anderson 2007-12-18 ch 1, | abuseI love the image that comes into my head as I read this. d:) You're a very talented writer! |