I've finally got some time to review your newest story. I really enjoy the global warming plot. It lends the story a kind of modern edge. I can't wait to see how you handle things. So far I don't much about the characters but I can't wait to find out more on them. Thanks for the new story.

An interesting concept, mixing a current event with a fantasy story.

You've run into the problem of talking heads with your dialogue. While there's nothing wrong with the dialogue itself, it comes out awkward and broken because the characters don't do anything while they're speaking. Every line is just 'the first one said' or 'the second one 'said'. Even if they're just walking through the snow, they'll still make expressions, or have body language.

Natural dialogue isn't always perfectly back-and-forth either. People don't always finish their toughts. They interrupt each other, or finish sentences for each other, or pause midsentence to think about things. Try going through your dialogue out loud. Remember what motions or expressions naturally come with what you say.

Good luck with this.