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| Joshua Amir Franco-Torres-J... 2007-12-24 ch 1,  | abuseWater slide... Ahahaha. I would have liked the spitting part to be addressed because I doubt the little men in white all undergo consumption. Yes... Funny. 5/5 |
| Audy 2007-12-21 ch 1, | abuseOh, gross... But the writing was great =) I must disagree with you though, the metaphors actually do work ;P Sounds just like something a guy would rant to himself... ~ Audy |