'The blood around your head was like a halo.'-- I think if you took out the word 'like', it would put more emphasis on your point.
Your definition of eternity is surprisingly accurate. It took me a second to comprehend what you had said, but when I did, I really liked it.
The parentheses you use to tell a substory are vivid. It puts a new layer to an otherwise deep piece.
-J.A.
Courtesy of the review marathon (link on profile).

interesting. well written, though. intriguing a little. not sure that i totally understand it but i thought it was nice. good work. = )

This is an interesting piece. It’s dark and dramatic but not overly so. My favorite line was, by far, “you looked as though you had died whilst in love.” Thanks for sharing this piece. Keep up the good work!