That was sweet! Although it was picking on things that are typically critisized with society, you put your twist on it... Especially when you said '(And when they really love someone they have nothing left to give)'. That pretty much said it. I liked this.

again you've written something i have respect for and you've done it in a way that will hopefully make people stop and think, good job.

very true... great piece.. I like it a lot

Very true, and it's even hopeful at the end. Great message, and the rhymes and rhythm felt natural. Good job.