I absolutely loved your take on a well knowned fairytale!
I've read this story several times and I can just picture Lionel and Kay together.

Thank you for sharing this very well written fairytale :o)

I totally loved this story. The siblings had such personality and character, with their little quirks and habits. Loved Darren's confession to get the woman he wanted --that just made solidified his position in the palace for me.

Love Alicia for the temper and quick sarcasm. Loved, most of all, Kayton for his gentle nature and unassuming ways, his artistic inclinations were a nice bonus.

Reading this from his perspective made it a little frustrating in places because I'm not of the same temperament --but that just makes me applaud you because you made him so believable that I felt passionately about his character and his contrasts to me. His protectiveness of Lionel was just sweet --I could relate to that. And how he dealt with the proposal when it finally came was just so dramatic but so him, that I was grinning at my screen the entire time he waited for his siblings' approval.

Loved the ending and the way you tied it all together from your own earlier humour about Happy Endings and fairytales. Love your sense of humour, by the way. Loved this whole story that I'm adding it to my favourites.

Thank you for sharing, and happy writing!

That's so sweet! I love it!

If you don't mind me beta-ing I read: "Kay had called her hair ‘red’ once and had never quite slept easy again after what she had put in his bed." None of these hads are necessary since you said once. 'Kay called her hair ‘red’ once and never quite slept easy again after what she put in his bed' makes just as much sense.

"feature of he crowd." the?

"his eyes too were fixed" I think the 'too' should have commas before and after.

curse too.”
“I’m CURSED now?!?” An extra line between the paragraphs.

That is a ingenious way to give an info dump without halting the story in its tracks.

"made his younger siblings sigh" older?

Very good. I'm glad Kay yelled at Lionel, he deserved it after embarrassing Kay like that, but of course he also will make Kay very happy.

This was great, thank you so much for sharing it.

Aw, so sweet! You've got some mad writing skills, i really enjoyed the mild sarcasm and the witty comments as well as some of the funny descriptions of people/places. These kind of remake stories of fairy tales tend to feel and sound hollow because of the plot not coming directly from the author but you managed very well, and even added what i assume is your own personal touch.

Super adorable! Yay!

Aww, this is the cutest! Lionel is such a charming guy. ^_^

Really lovely - the tone is perfect, and wraps it all into an adorable whole.

awesome story!

I love this ^_^

Loved this retelling of FP. My favorite part was the end where Lionel says yes but don't tell your father

XD This is simply adorable! I hope you write more like it. :) Great job! especially with the color description. Are you an artist? because you do an extremely good job of capturing the scenes one would want to paint. :)

E! OMG that was adorable! *_*

I don't know how I didn't see this before but it is just... ^_^ WHEE!

That was adorable! I loved it!