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| Reine Ayten 2008-07-03 ch 19,  | abuseNice... Toki as a girl... wow. The fight scenes were AMAZING! I also like how everyone isn't how they first appear... and the whole Altaer in the pjs and the guinea pig was really funny! |
| Equilibrium 2008-07-03 ch 19, | abuseI love their reactions to the... uh... situation. |
| CreativebutLazy 2008-07-01 ch 1, | abusenow that is a good opening. |
| Samantha Marie Haven 2008-06-13 ch 18, | abuseWow there is so much going on, and all these are starting to pop up and seem like they'll give the characters some real trouble (in the story, i mean) i love it! i love trouble for the characters, because without it things are just too simple. and all the characters are very well developed, and i can't name one i don't like, so bravo! i think i have the most interest in Creves and Altaer now, though. Jack doesn't have too much emotional and psychological turmoil going on like the rest, he seems kinda like the comedy relief. maybe that will change, but for now, the relief is nice. you got the troubled characters and then characters like Jack, who keep it up beat, in a way. but i have no doubt he'll find some trouble himself, knowing that he seems to like trouble :) please update as soon as you can! i really want to find out what is truly going on here!! happy writing :) ~Samantha Marie |
| L3G3nD 2008-06-13 ch 18, | abuseWow this chapter is so far the most engaging chapter I've read. The lobster thing is just plain funny! LOL. And everything is just so intense plus hilarious! Good job there, CK and E. Keep up with the hard work! Happy writing! ^^ |
| PrettiestWretchedWhore 2008-05-21 ch 17, | abuseOkay I decided to review because last time I read this I couldn't pay attention. >_< But it's a decent chapter. Actually I can't pay much attention now... I seem to be typing random things... concerning really. Oh well. You remind me of an amateur Stephen King. I know that you're going to be all "AMATEUR!?!??!?! HOW DARE YOU!?!??", but really it's an honour to be compared to Stephen King at all, especially by me. But yeah it was good. Anyway sorry for bugging you (not with this review but in general life). Well good job! |
| Smileymiley248 XD 2008-05-18 ch 1, | abuseyo thnx for the review um i am grounded and should not be on the computer (sh)I am working on the grammer but might not update for a while but will try to keep in contact! dont hate me if it takes awhile though...how many are u anyway? 5? lol will try to keep in contact cya! XD |
| MasterofMadness 2008-05-13 ch 17, | abuseAhh no fair! Bad cliffy! Wow, you certainly know how to capture a reader. Great story! |
| Equilibrium 2008-05-13 ch 17, | abuseClimatic. |
| Smileymiley248 XD 2008-05-03 ch 16, | abuseThis story is AWSOME! cant wait for the next chap! and whos going to hook up with Wynn? If it's Altaer then can he al least get idk a prank hair cut by Jack? I was sorta hopeing that Wynn would go with toki though... oh well good luck!XD |
| Equilibrium 2008-04-30 ch 16, | abuseNice chapter, you two. I wonder how many detentions Jack will have by the end of the year... |
| Feere Gorone 2008-04-24 ch 5, | abuseI'm noticing that the chapters are kinda short, but they're good enough to make up for that. I'm hoping that they'll be longer as the story progresses. |
| Feere Gorone 2008-04-24 ch 3, | abuseI quite liked the last few lines. Not much else I can say really, it's pretty good. |
| Feere Gorone 2008-04-23 ch 2, | abuseFirst chapter's not bad. I'll see how the rest are. |
| Feere Gorone 2008-04-23 ch 1, | abuseThis is quite good. I'll see how this unique way of story telling turns out. |