This was a truely poetic and beautiful piece. It had such passion and heart put into that you could feel the narrator's every emotion and whim very strongly, that the readers builds a very strong connection with the narrator despite the shortness of the story.

Your word choicing and flow was exquisitely done. I saw little to no spelling or grammar mistakes, showing the vigilence you put into your writing and I see no reasons for criticism. I like how you don't just throw out information for the reader, leaving a lot of things in the dark and up to the reader's imaagination.

Once again, beautiful job and I look forward to reading more of your work.

I really enjoyed the imagery in this piece. It adequately conveyed the dichotomy of the protagonist’s nature. My favorite line: If such beauty like yours were everywhere, the destruction of all man would inevitably follow, for you are cunning and sly like the fox, whom is also admired for his charm. (Ironically I found an error in this line; it should be who, the subjective pronoun, not whom, the objective pronoun.)
I did not like the title. Perhaps I simply “didn’t get it.” Either way I didn’t feel it connected to the piece very well. I realize there was a line with the word heretic, but I felt that line was out of place.
Nicki BluIs

Wow, this piece was absolutely AMAZING! You displayed the character's emotions very well. It felt like I was actually holding a conversation with them. Very realistic! Also, your writing style is exquisite! It kept my interest the old time, and sounded very Victorian. It can be hard to write like that because no one talks like that anymore, but you did it wonderfully!

The only thing I caught:

"I am so near to you you sometimes reflect on my glass, and I watch as five images dance across my eyes, surrounding me; transfixing me."

I think there should be a comma between the two you's at the beginning of the sentence. Without on there, it's confusing.

But besides that, I thought this was a very well written piece! Keep it up!