Oh I love it! It makes me so nostalgic. I remember all of those angsty feelings from being a teenager. I love the allusion to Romeo and Juliet. I like that you took the theme and made it new and current and rellevant and oh so powerful. I want to read the rest! You should finish the story! Please?

aw this was so cute! i loved it =)

This is really good! Really well written, good job

O.o oh! interesting!! ^^

Beautifully written, I kind of like this slight basis on Romeo and Juliet. The character's inner turmoil is shown very well, and this was an excellent addition from woodstock1969 to our c2. (:

ah interesting..kept me kind of glued right from the start--though i knew what was gonna happen..lol. your style writing is quite good, keeps me kinda interested to read more. just a slight mistake towards the end.

You wrote, "Why you kiss me?". But i think it was supposed to be "Why did you kiss me?". Well at least i think so anyway.But other than that, it was definitely well done, considering the fact that you wrote this in less than an hour! :D keep up the great work!

Woah... *is speechless* I love your style of writing. I also like how you never really explained the main character or even Kale. It was nice and sweet. Just like that!
Great work, keep it up!