I really enjoyed this story. Your writing is very polished. It felt like a moment in a life captured on paper. Everything, from the description to the dialogue, danced around the past of Liz and Ayden. The tension that created for the ending was great. I also liked the last sentence...very poetic. Thanks for sharing.

~Divine Macabre

Okay. Rochelle.

This certain piece stung and resonated sharply, for what specific reason I am reluctant to disclose, even to you. I can't say that I will read it again, or even look it over for that matter. It was truly and simply intricate-- beautiful. Perhaps I have gotten more out of it than I should have, but... one cannot help but wonder, especially as my imaginitive mind does take me on quite the venture. Just as I am feeling comfortable, you have kept me quite on my toes. I'm not good at dancing, Rochelle-- and with your words as pins in the pads of my feet, I am sure to learn quickly.

--Katja Aeron V.

Interesting. Not quite what I expected (after reading the summary). The story's just vague enough to let the reader run free with their imaginations, and the excellent writing only accents that. (: Wonderful oneshot, and a lovely addition of woodstock1969's to our c2. (:

lol, she wasn't a bit professional /at all/ in this chapter xD Nah, but I loved this. Very well-written, it kept me very intrigued. You do a great job characterizing your narrator. The dialogue flowed smoothly, very natural. I didn't catch many mistakes...I can't find anything that I /didn't/ like about this.

Good job, I'm definitely sticking around for the next chapter.

~ Audy