Wow.
Great short peace, love the discriptions.

Wow. That was amazing use of vocab and description, and the sort of poetry-form thing. I like how at the beginning it has the sort of "what does this word make you think of?" pattern and they all result in "kill". Great metaphor for the fact that everyone's life ends in death eventually.
Is this going to keep going? Because I like it.

oh. my. god.
i love this story!
ur a seriously great author, and i am so going to read more of your stories.
keep up the fantastic work!