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| Artemis Reborn 2008-03-21 ch 1,  | abuseIt seems you have a knack for this. =) Another very powerfully worded haiku to ponder. I do agree with Autumn Reflections, that somehow the last line could be better, but hey! Whoever said poetry was easy lied. (And one day, when I find that person...! hehe) Thank you again, and keep it up! Art. |
| Autumn Reflections 2008-01-28 ch 1, | abuseThe last line seems to be missing a bit, but it works all the same. Very rich in emotion. |
| gigglebug 2008-01-23 ch 1, | abuseI think haikus are my favourite for a couple reasons. for one thing, they're short and a quick read, but I think a lot of people don't realize how much work it is to create a really GOOD haiku: compression, or saying a lot with a few words. You've really done a fabulous job, congrats! note: I'm not british / aulstrailian (sp, SORRY!) but I like spelling weird. it's only a U in most cases, right? ;) |
| Maggot Blood 2008-01-07 ch 1, | abuseIt really got me thinking about some personal troubles in my life so far, but what does not kill me, may just do so in the end. (Ha got you!). Nice work. Maggot. |
| Dreaming Chica 2008-01-03 ch 1, | abuseWow, 3 lines yet so much emotion was put into this poem! SO well done! ♥ Dreaming Chica♥ |
| the Stranger in the moonlig... 2007-12-31 ch 1, | abuseThats a depresing thought... |
| .mate.feed.kill.repeat. 2007-12-30 ch 1, | abuseYou just said in three lines what I've tried to say in hundreds of words for three months. I must applaud you. -stix- |
| Julius Gillian 2007-12-29 ch 1, | abuseWe're always willing to second guess what people say to us that may seem harmful or hurtful at first glance, but not so much as we review it. We especially do this with people we hold dear to our hearts, regardless if we know them or not. This haiku conveys just that. Congratulations, this was well thought out and done. |
| Moondog Dozier 2007-12-27 ch 1, | abuseInteresting swing from line one to three. Well written haiku. MD:77. |
| ema 2007-12-26 ch 1, anon. | abuseI read your stuff a lot and this is the first time i comment because i think you deserve to know that i`m out there and that i really like what you write. But, man, you really get a lot of comments!! I guess a lot of ppl can see that your stuff is really good...unless you`re one of those attention-hungry people that reviews everyone with the same basic review so that she gets comments back... lol jk. seriously, great work!! |
| Manuel Fajar 2007-12-26 ch 1, | abuseIn love's abandonment lies reflection As to values we would assign their choice For in the sway that mortality holds Lies no assurance of a vision clear So if red heart is torn with affection It is a chance for clear soul to rejoice For it's a happiness that each day molds Irrespective possession of what's dear |
| Basara 2007-12-25 ch 1, | abusea question erupts when something goes wrong... nice... is it? |
| loversdream17 2007-12-23 ch 1, | abuseGreat job. Short and sweet which some of the best are. Great job. keep up the good work. Mandi~4~life |
| kloun doll 2007-12-23 ch 1, | abuseit's a heartfelt piece that makes me think. happy holidays. |
| SirScott 2007-12-22 ch 1, | abuseGood one. ~SirScott |