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| chocolatemusic 2008-09-16 ch 1,  | abuseaw cute. I love one-shots. Good work :) |
| Kir 2008-08-28 ch 1, anon. | abuseAw this is so cute! i loved the part where she said Mouth, meet Brain, Brain will help you say the RIGHT things hilarious great job |
| Kyllex of Darkness 2008-08-10 ch 1, | abuseAww! Okay, that was adorable. Even though it's not anywhere near Christmas, I still enjoyed reading it. xD It was so cute, and really well written. Good job! :] I loved it. x3 |
| ilymtwces 2008-07-31 ch 1, | abuseAw, CUTENESS! haha. loved it. |
| adarkrequest 2008-07-19 ch 1, | abuseIt was sweet, I liked it. |
| x3life 2008-07-18 ch 1, | abuseaw how cute!! =) |
| Lily Llynn 2008-07-18 ch 1, | abuseKinda really extremely fluffy/cliche, but again it's pretty well-written and I like it. (: I'm glad woodstock1969 added this to our c2. (: |
| Oooh.Look.A Cat 2008-07-18 ch 1, | abusegasp i think i know that house haha or maybe i know a house similar to it either way its horrible we stopped driving past it or even going anywhere near it well, i refused to go so my parents couldn't just leave me at home which is the reason why we stopped but other than that very cute one shot izzie |
| JoiZ. D 2008-07-17 ch 1, | abuseAww... that was so cute! I loved it! -tries to imagine a house full of lights for decorations- |
| Amaryllis Faye 2008-06-27 ch 1, | abusewhat fluff . what fun :) |
| found.eventually 2008-03-14 ch 1, | abuseThat girl is SO blur. Haha, I actually liked it a lot, but my attention swayed a little from the beginning. Prolly because you elaborated too much on the minor details, and the confession was uhm.. Just there. But I still liked it, because it still turned me into goo. :) |
| Wish I was Anonymous Author... 2008-01-01 ch 1, | abuseHA ha ha, Nice. I would do the same thing as she did in the Mistletoe case... be oblivious. |
| The Jet Black Hotel Mirror 2007-12-24 ch 1, | abuse"Mouth, meet Brain, Brain will help you say the RIGHT things." Hahaha, I loved that line!! =D This was very cute and ORIGINAL. I rarely find stories like that. And, haha, don't worry...I live in Texas and it never snows on Christmas Day. In fact, it's Christmas Eve and it's very sunny out! Keep writing! |
| Jo_luv_na 2007-12-24 ch 1, anon. | abusei didn't like it THAT much. it was pretty plain in comparrison to some of your other work. the beginning ran on too long, and i couldn't really concentrate. (or maybe thats just beacuse i am writing this at eleven o clock at night...) also, from way early on in their conversation i figured out that she was the girl he was waiting for... and that sort of ruined the story for me. i mean, maybe that was what you were going for or something (for the audience to know, but the character doesn't) but i think its better to have a surprize. coz it was all a bit : "i know whats gonna happen, i know whats gonna happen, -- OOH look it happened" next time maybe lead the audience in a different direction but then flip it to that ending... if that makes any sence... (O__O) but good work. it was a nice idea, its just the writing itself needs some adjustments. i hope i wasn't too harsh. i was tryin to be constructive. tffn. |
| MiscellaneousMe 2007-12-22 ch 1, | abuseaww thats so cute =] |