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| -Truly-Verily-Purely-Me- 2008-03-26 ch 1,  | abuseGosh, I really like you work so far(I'm making it my goal this evening to read all of them.) |
| Fyxthamnzwik 2008-03-26 ch 1, | abuseI like this one, which is a bonus because I'm not a big fan of free verse. some things you might want to correct: Don’t answer her call as "you" soul faults and falls should be "your"? I would drop "the" before lost souls in line 3 change dead to the dead or death in line 4 capitalize Winter and make it Winter's in line 5 to further emphasize your personification of it. "The frozen wonderland of broken backs and dreams Whisper softly" if the frozen wonderland is doing the whispering, which seems to be the case, you should say "Whispers" for S-V agreement. I was a fan of yours back when you were under a different pen-name. I've been negligent with posting lately, but I've recently added a few things you might enjoy. |
| Timeless Asuka 2008-03-21 ch 1, | abuseAnother beautiful poem! I love all your works so much! Keep it up, alright? For all your fans (and I'm sure you have some). "Dance, dance into the frost/Don’t answer her call as you soul faults and falls" Again, another wonderful line. It's so beautiful, and so... majestic, almost. ~~ AmarokUchiha ~~ |
| surrealphobia 2008-02-23 ch 1, | abuseOh wow! I hvaen't been on here in forever. You're still writing! Once again this is all amazing work and I can't wait until you publish more. This has such a wintery theme to it, I guess it's hard for me to relate because it never gets down past 80 here, but still the imagery is marvelous! Happy writing, Surreal |
| fatbird33 2008-02-19 ch 1, | abuseoh this is so dark! |
| Joshua Amir Franco-Torres-J... 2008-01-30 ch 1, | abuseOh my dear goodness. "bites your nose" I found to be quite humourous. Though the rest of the poem had a serious tone... So maybe that wasn't supposed to be funny. Frostbite hurts. Is she evil or just a force of nature? |
| Dr. Colleen 2008-01-28 ch 1, | abuseI think Edgar would be proud. And I like it too. Cheers, Colleen |
| Steel Winged Angel 2008-01-20 ch 1, | abuseVery nice. Great imagry and flow. |
| I.O.K.O 2008-01-11 ch 1, | abusethe frozen layer of hell |
| thursdays and rain 2008-01-11 ch 1, | abusedreamy.. by the way, thanks for adding me on your fave authors' list ;) |
| Princess-anna57 2007-12-22 ch 1, | abuseWell done. I like it. Keep writing. ~Anna~ |