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Aria of the Sun 2008-03-26 . chapter 1
Gosh, I really like you work so far(I'm making it my goal this evening to read all of them.)
Fyxthamnzwik 2008-03-26 . chapter 1
I like this one, which is a bonus because I'm not a big fan of free verse.

some things you might want to correct:

Don’t answer her call as "you" soul faults and falls
should be "your"?

I would drop "the" before lost souls in line 3
change dead to the dead or death in line 4
capitalize Winter and make it Winter's in line 5 to further emphasize your personification of it.

"The frozen wonderland of broken backs and dreams
Whisper softly"
if the frozen wonderland is doing the whispering, which seems to be the case, you should say "Whispers" for S-V agreement.

I was a fan of yours back when you were under a different pen-name. I've been negligent with posting lately, but I've recently added a few things you might enjoy.
Wolven Lied 2008-03-21 . chapter 1
Another beautiful poem! I love all your works so much! Keep it up, alright? For all your fans (and I'm sure you have some).
"Dance, dance into the frost/Don’t answer her call as you soul faults and falls"
Again, another wonderful line. It's so beautiful, and so... majestic, almost.

~~ AmarokUchiha ~~
surrealphobia 2008-02-23 . chapter 1
Oh wow!

I hvaen't been on here in forever. You're still writing! Once again this is all amazing work and I can't wait until you publish more. This has such a wintery theme to it, I guess it's hard for me to relate because it never gets down past 80 here, but still the imagery is marvelous!

Happy writing,
Surreal
fatbird33 2008-02-19 . chapter 1
oh this is so dark!
Joshua Amir Franco-Torres-Jaft 2008-01-30 . chapter 1
Oh my dear goodness. "bites your nose" I found to be quite humourous. Though the rest of the poem had a serious tone... So maybe that wasn't supposed to be funny. Frostbite hurts.

Is she evil or just a force of nature?
Dr. Colleen 2008-01-28 . chapter 1
I think Edgar would be proud. And I like it too.
Cheers,
Colleen
Steel Winged Angel 2008-01-20 . chapter 1
Very nice. Great imagry and flow.
I.O.K.O 2008-01-11 . chapter 1
the frozen layer of hell
thursdays and rain 2008-01-11 . chapter 1
dreamy.. by the way, thanks for adding me on your fave authors' list ;)
Princess-anna57 2007-12-22 . chapter 1
Well done. I like it. Keep writing.

~Anna~
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