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| Zonne 2008-04-20 ch 1,  | abuseThe sentence below confused me. I think 'referred to should' go. Danica had a power that she only knew she could connect with nature in a different way then other people referred to. That is a weird interesting story. Very unique idea. I like it. It's really hard to read the way it runs together in one long paragraph. I think you would get more readers and reviews if you split it up. It's a very clever story. A scary fairy tale and a fable twisted together. Gore is a great name too! good writing, keep at it Zonne The review marathon (link in my profile) |