Great job. You made a spelling mistakes though...

5th line from the top. You put "dear" when Im guessing you meant to put "deal."

Just thought Id let you know.

Great ending. It's a better cliffhanger, but is there a specific reason why Brian is moving to Ireland? Im confused.

Cant wait for the next chapter!

I wanna know what the mysterious "something" is in Chad's mailbox!! ♥

Great job Jonathon!! It's amazing! Cant wait for the next chapter... Such a cliffhanger...

The story is GREAT. HURRY UP AND WRITE... You're amazing. There's nothing you need to change. It's FANTASTIC...

Answers: The Crow and The Princess Bride

Are you happy now Yoohoo? LOL XD

Lol. It was kind of strange reading this while listening to "Let Me Love You" by Mario. Anyhow. You did a good job.

Good thing you're not just giving up. I'm dying to see how he reacts when Chad finally discovers who his "mystery" girl really is, hehee. Hope you get your computer up and running soon. I know it sucks being without one. Later =D

Well, atleast you have a reason. I was about to leave you a serious flame :)

There are some sentences where actions are written inside the quotation marks, thus making it a part of what the person is saying. You may want to work on that :)

The teacher is pretty mean...

You really should relax their speech a little. It sounds so stilted. Oh and uniforms rock! lol I don't have to wear 'em so of course they rock! :D

Teachers suck and his mom sounds a lil harsh there but I'm still reading so...

My advice: try to use more contractions when people are talking. Constantly repeating the words "will" or "I am" makes what they're saying sound forced. But that's nothing major. Even if they continue speaking that way, it won't affect the story. Good job, as before.

Reminds me of my Chaddy..Anyhow..I've got nothing constructive to say..I'll get a cup of coffee, you'll post another chapter, and then we'll talk? Hehe :)