hm... is chrysanthemum a color? (lilac is...) I'm not sure what the part after that means. The quotes are not quite right somehow.

This has an overall dreamy feel... lots of high contrast and color-feelings. It was fun. ^^ Maybe it's the images thrown in with the dialogue... like stream-of-consciousness... that makes me think the narrator is not quite awake.

I like the last part: "If you hold my hand and I hold yours (the earth is Churning beneath us) we can make Day and night quicken." Great job, and keep writing!