|Reviews for Untitled|
| Eshi 3/2/13 . chapter 1
Interesting. I'm always thinking about if romance can happen between a bully and a victim. And the problems they'll face.
Cute, sweet fic, feels short and drabble-y. I enjoyed it. Although I am unsure how Troy's promises will stick. (Good name choice by the way, Troy sounds like such an asshole name. _) I'm glad "narrator" has a voice, and doesn't totally except him right away.
YUP. That's as literary as my reviews get. WRITE ON!
| Maria 1/22/13 . chapter 1
| NicJean 6/22/12 . chapter 1
I can't decide whether I love or hate this. Wonderfully written, of course. The language you use to paint such a picture is beautiful. But the ending. I don't know if it's a happy ending or a lie. I wish you would continue it. I want to see what happens the next day at school. What happens with Troy's friends.
In any case, beautiful story. Your writing style is a pleasure to read.
| Critiqui 3/4/12 . chapter 1
This is one of those kinds of stories that doesn't need an absolute ending. Your story needed that mysterious air at the end and it made me think the obvious was going to happen: They'd go right back into the cycle of hate and love. However, after reading some other reviews, I thought, 'Wait, this story could have different ways of ending. They both could actually end up running away or a more tragic event could happen.' This piece of work deserves a good A-plus.
P.S. I don't think I saw the victim's name. I found that the tormentor's name was Troy, but never really saw his lover's. I think it'd be good to include that info because when Troy doesn't use his name to address the narrator when they're alone, it feels a little less intimate. Or, Troy could've used a nickname or something that would maybe hint at the narrator's true name.
| AssassinNumber7 1/4/12 . chapter 1
aw, cute! love the main character!
| Velvetkiller 11/13/11 . chapter 1
I like how you played the homosexual and the homophobe together. And I LOVE the fact that you made him very strong willed like, that he sees what is happening to him.
| Kidiu Anaji 1/29/11 . chapter 1
I'm not sure what I think of this. Whether it ended sadly or somewhat happily. It ended rather abruptly, so I'm not sure of what happened afterwords.
| LadyFreeWill 1/9/11 . chapter 1
Good story. It's romantic and angsty but slightly cheesy. You should work on the cheesy-ness. No one wants their readers to burst out laughing during the supposedly-intense scenes.
| sugarpie-chan 1/9/11 . chapter 1
oh! that was so! ... that was so cute! X3
ack! the angst, drama, love! ... ._.
sorry... but it was so beautiful!
| Puncher 11/2/10 . chapter 1
O! I want to see what happens next, then I don't want to!
| teal duck 10/24/10 . chapter 1
I wish I could say something about this that you haven't already heard twenty-some times but: beautiful, depressing, irritating and just amazing. GAH! Wish there was more! :(
| theauthor94 8/5/10 . chapter 1
I want to read more... if there is more...
| lost in pale blue 7/29/10 . chapter 1
This is well-written, but made me so sad. It's the epitome of an abusive relationship, where the abuser keeps apologizing and the abused keeps taking him/her back.
| Polo Smartie 7/25/10 . chapter 1
Such an adorable story. Too bad it only went so far. You have an amazing way with words :)
| TentaLove 4/22/10 . chapter 1
Omg I love u! This story is so amazing! I cryed and cryed! but i had to stop because i was worrying my boy friend to the point he couldn't watch his football game "LOL"
(Also forgive my english i only started to learn it a few years 3years ago) :(