no one can ignore the first line. lovely.

i was finding a hard time following the rhythm though.

good job still

truly yours...

beautiful. short but definitely has an impact. i love the line: "and the simple rhythm of my heart drowned out the look on his face..." great work! :)

Aw cute C. Short and sweet. Nice imagery, and I liked how you made it seem real but then say it was a dream (or was it? as you say) Nice job.

Beautiful. The ending was so sweet and impacting. Very nice word choice. The details really added to the piece. Well done.

Lovely work. It was well written and carried a lot of meaning for me.

Unknown Survivor

aw, everybody wants to be listened and love is a hard journey.

beautiful piece.. I love the question of whether or not it was a dream

"…and the simple rhythm of my heart

drowned out the look on his face…"

Simply amazing. I love your style of writing. So simple and elegant, yet it says so much. Especially love the ending. Oh, and the imagery is very vivid. Overal... I adore it. No joke. :)

That was PURE poetry! Thank you!

-Blood

I really love the meaningful simplicity of the first line. My only real criticism is that it seems like the poem might have flowed a little better with less ...

i enjoyed the simplicity to this.

short and extra sweet. :)

-enjoy reading your work. keep it up.

oh, this is so sweet! cute and...vulnerable?

I liked this piece. The first line really caught my attention; it seems like such a simple statement, but somehow it seemed like a confession, which was much more interesting. Keep up the good work.

it's really nice, but not the best.

(i mean, i love you and everything, and it's still so much better than what i could do, but it's just /not/ the best).