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| Tytherpol 2007-12-30 ch 1,  | abusethis is incredible. it's so rich in the interesting formulas you added the second stanza is my favorite, but it is the one that bothered me most in this piece--too solid, dry, and there are just i guess too many theories associated with ground/air though i adore the "Tongues white as/Gravity" relay you tied with it i think it's an insanely beautiful stanza...how you worded it. actually, i just love the thoughts behind the whole piece. your children stanza is so sharp (neat comparison/contrast thing). just neat. |