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Tytherpol
2007-12-30
ch 1,
abusethis is incredible.

it's so rich in the interesting formulas you added

the second stanza is my favorite, but it is the one that bothered me most in this piece--too solid, dry, and there are just i guess too many theories associated with ground/air though i adore the "Tongues white as/Gravity" relay you tied with it
i think it's an insanely beautiful stanza...how you worded it.

actually, i just love the thoughts behind the whole piece.

your children stanza is so sharp (neat comparison/contrast thing).

just neat.
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