Was the last line supposed to be two lines? If not it's missing a space. Also any more is one word.

I like the piece, it's definitely very relateable. The whole not wanting to get up thing especially.

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Again, I think you used the word pride too much. I like the descriptions of her pride and how some of it focuses on personal appearance that's a nice job. The only thing is the the last three lines, the last two work together and the line before it works with the other idea, but it just didn't flow into the last two lines well.

I think the repetition of alone got to be a bit much and some repetition of other parts as well. I think the idea was great, it's realteable and a good message, but I think the execution needs a bit of work.

I love the title because it's so fitting to the piece. I also like the idea of the piece, it's one of those serves you right pieces... lol. The only thing I didn't like is that a lot of the rhyming seemed kind of forced.

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Well written poem except "your gone" should be "you're gone". Nice work. Keep writing!

Good luck with poetry and life. Have a lovely day and a wonderful summer.

~Twilight Starr~

That was good
You should jus thinkin of everything going for you
That's what I had to do
Try it for a week
Don't be scared.
You have support that will help you
*^.^*
Im sure you could figure out how to write in a diff way after you try it