Are you sure you’re all right?...alright
The wound looks awful deep.. awfully
Save you energy...your

I love the ending... it pretty much sums up the whole piece.. it's full of emotions and I love how you describe his numbness and feelings... it's nice

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Oh, that is so SAD! That's not really my type of poem. Well, it wasn't. Now it is! Your poem is great!

That's really intense. Fabulous work. It makes my head spin (in a good way). Awesome job, once again. =)