Reviews for Little White Room

Reviews For: Little White Room

soliloquium 2007-12-27 ch 1,	abusei really loved that one. it's seriously amazing. keep on writing: you've got a gift! m.t.h
painted.music 2007-12-26 ch 1,	abusekonban wa Really? This is how you feel? That's a scary thought. I've had weeks where I've fallen into some sort of depression for no apparent reason, but thank God I'm out of that now - I can sympathize if that's how you're feeling (though I didn't contemplate suicide). This had a nice rhythm to it, sort of creepy-innocent. Another well-written piece. :) Again, many favorite lines. -- "Strapped to a bed in my private white room" -- I just thought it was an excellent way to begin your poem. I don't know why, but it really draws the reader in somehow. -- That whole stanza that you put into your summary, firstly: good idea putting it in the summary because that really captures people's attention. Secondly: great lines altogether. -- "Now wrapped in my dreams from a drug-induced sleep" -- nice imagery here. Again, it really helped to set the mood. Brill. -- "They are so strong, and I feel so weak" -- good contrast or juxtaposition or whatever it's called. I don't really know or care; I just know it sounded good next to each other. Helped with the rhythm. There are more, but I'm exhausted. Our bus got home late tonight -- so I got home at around 7 at night instead of just 6:45. Long bus rides kill me, especially with traffic. In any case, I'm rambling; so I'll shut up now. :) Definitely a published-author-to-be! :D Never stop writing! Gute nacht -Shan-
In the Rye 2007-12-26 ch 1,	abuseWell, seeing as you're twelve I'm going to assume you've never actually been in a psyche ward or met anyone who was actually schizophrenic. I'm also going to assume that being so young you've probably never encountered anything really alarming that life throws at you. Until you have, I suggest you write about what you know.

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