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| LiLi the Koala 2008-02-22 ch 1,  | abuseOnce again, beautiful. The words tell a story, and you can see the images fairly clear in your mind. The passion is well described, though it may not be obvious to those who miss things like that. But anyways, it's wonderfuly awesome. Read it! Now! Or later, no pressure... Everyone should read it, because everyone at some point ion their lives can relate to it, to having those feelings for someone. As I said, it's beautiful. |
| girl without wings 2007-12-27 ch 1, | abuseI like this piece. It flows quite nicely. I liked the contrast between hot and cold and your descriptions of the relationship. The lines with three verbs were well-used, too, I think. Very effective. Keep up the good work! |