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| Ferrero Rocher 2008-04-28 ch 4,  | abuseHello. New reviewer.Actually, I read your story quite some time ago,and didn't review.Laziness.Well, I just wanted to say that your story was okay when I first read it, but now...Utterly,completely confusing.I am going to be very honest with you.The fact that in chapter 3 I think , you give us some insignificant precisions doesn't practically change anything at all. I advise you to reread your chapters, correct all of your errors and grammatical mistakes(they're important to our comprehension), and to write each time Saph's POV etc.Now, do you see what I mean?If you have new ideas just don't hesitate about writing them, because what's life without a bit of risk(okay, corny...).Also improve the sumary, it's essential. Your story does have a good potential,and I hope you'll do what I said. Toodles, Ferrero Rocher |
| darling81 2008-04-26 ch 4, | abuseI really like how you introduce each chapter with a song. I think that is a nice touch. To help clarify who is narrating, you could put the person's name at the start of each of their section. Also when you have the time try to re-read what you have written because there is some grammar/spelling/sentence structure things you should look into. -darling81 |
| MidnightThief15 2007-12-28 ch 2, | abuseI guess that's where the title comes from. So Sapphire's gonna be the main character I guess. I noticed how Sapphire and Diamond are both jewels. Good chapter and story so far. Can't wait to read the next one. Oh, and you HAVE to make a love interest for Sapphire! XD |
| hypa to hell and back 2007-12-28 ch 3, | abusethank you for this im not confused now ohew im glad that over thanks for tha\t keep going and sorry your grounded |
| hypa to hell and back 2007-12-28 ch 2, | abuseahh im confused but i guess that will all become clear in chaoters to come very good keep going i love it |
| hypa to hell and back 2007-12-27 ch 1, | abusefirst of all is this sentance mean to be like this...On that note I put on my headphones put my headphones on and continued to my locker...or not.i was just wondering besides that little thing i found it very good i like ip keep going will you please |
| Social Recast 2007-12-27 ch 1, | abusewhat if you don't get five? then what? i don't get to read the rest 3= well, i was a little confused, but i think its off to a good start!! haha i don't like all the labels tho 3= but it's still okay good job |