D: TRENT! OH NOES! You have to update, otherwise I shall explode! DX
XD Anyway, great chapter! Can't wait for the next one. :D

This is very intersting. I love how fresh the concept is, and I can tell it can be taken in many different directions. You did a clean job of showing each character, even though there were quite a few. However, I think you can improve this chapter by revising your work: I found a couple typos and superfluous words. Dialogue pattern could also flow a little better, if you make it more uninterrupted.

Have a great day!
-DV-

Nice chapter. :) It was interesting, but a little slow moving in some spots. Oh, and in the beginning of the chapter you used 'meat' instead of 'meet'. But other than that, great job!

^o^ Loved it, as usual! It was awesome, and the part with Lee was pure lol. xD Aww, poor Trent =( Ooh, things are heating up now! *sniffle* I sense the end of the story nearing. It makes me sad because I love this story so much. ='( Update soon — And I'll try to edit faster too! Dx

Okay... so I'm not understanding...
WHY haven't you updated in FOREVER?!
Not fair. I mean come on! You can't stop now!!
It's so good! :)
I'd have to say Trent is my favourite though!

There were a few minor spelling errors like "past" instead of "passed" but I like the direction of this story. It draws your readers in. I think I'm going to read the next chapter.

So, I'm reviewing now, and I'm reviewing once I read all 9 chapters.
Amazing yet again! =)
I love all the different kinds of stories you have.
This one is original, and I love how there are angels. I like where this is going and can't wait to read more.
The word 'but' pops up quite a few times, maybe you could try to switch it with another word like however, or yet, or something.
I would also like to point out that I like the evil guy, but... he sounds very evil.
Keep up the fabulous work!

Review Game-age!

Firstly, I love the sound of the premise! It definitely sounds original and interesting.

But...well, that's just it - you use the word 'but' a but-I mean BIT! - too much, I'm afraid. Every sentence someone begins to speak with seems to be 'But,' at the start of this part. It gets a tad redundant and boring, as well as seeming pointless and out-of-place at most times.

Anyway, onto the positives!

It was a good start to the story, definitely sets it up well. I like the whole mythos you have around all the elements and angels, and that snow is angel dust - kinda cute. Samaru seemed pretty evil, so he must've been terribly peeved, lol. I'd love to read on and follow Yuki's journey back to her real home, but I have to get off soon, darn :S

All in all, a good start to a definitely promising story!

Cy/Dave

I used to be obsessed with mangas. i even translated a few series for the online readers.
*sigh. good ol days.

anyyways. review:
In the beginning i was a little thrown off by the different names/titles. i kinda wished there was more of a setting based intro.
but afterwards, it flowed well and the dialogue(again) was really great.
you write really well!

ACK!
Cliff Hanger!
No way!!
And I was getting so into it!
Love the story!! The detail in it is amazing :D
Update soon :D

And the plots thickens! Ack! The suspense! What is Ravid gonna do to the two? And what was he holding? Oh, I hope no one dies! Yay! The next one will be longer than this chappie! Though this one was short I enjoyed it. It cleared lots of stuffs up! ^.^ The battle of good versus evil! Oh, Yuki is so gonna win. She's just awesome like that. Did I ever tell you she's an awesome character? I'm still sad that this story is getting closer to the end, but I really loved reading it and I know the ending won't disappoint me because you're an amazing writer! Update ASAP! Lots of love!

Nice story so far. I'm working on one too. Check it out when you have time.

Continue soon.

GAH! You updated! I almost cried tears of joy! This chapter was short, BUT WORTH THE WAIT!

NO! TRENT! Ravid must DIE! I can't believe Yuki actually agreed to go on a date with him -.-;;

Lol, I laughed when Lee started playing soccer. How did you know? ;) I actually kinf of felt bad in the end for him cuz of his whole family trouble. Maybe I should use that in She's the Man? ;)

Aw! I don't want this story to end! And if it's ending is getting close that means it IS going to end! No! I think I'm gonna go cry now. Anyway... Things are starting to heat up now, huh? Can't wait for the next chapter! GO TYPE WOMAN!

Wow, this was a good update and so suspenseful at that! I can't wait for another chapter, oh and happy birthday though it's probably late >

:D loved it. i laughed at all the fighting. mwa ha: '“** you Lee!” Aaron yelled in front of the science teacher as he raised his fist once more.' that part almost made me pee my pants. keep up the good work! ;)