this is a really good story i luv it i hope u make more of it~

Amazing. Really, really good - wow. This was really entertaining. I'll be sure to check out your other stories.

I do believe that I quite like this story.

Firstly, thanks for the suggestion, and sorry it took me so long to get to reading it.

As for the story, I think it's very well-written, but I don't think I would add it to my c2. :P I'm afraid I'm not a big fan of smut (or, scenes with intercourse). I do think this is excellent, sophisticated writing, though, and despite its short length, the characters are also portrayed very well.

cute!
I liked the beginning- the way you draw a parallel between Chales and the an increasingly industrial world, and his folks, more of the romantic period- i think it would have been good if you'd continued it even further, though- Especially with the mention of Orwell.

As for Charles and Nicholas- a nice idea, and i also enjoyed how Nicholas was the more self assured of the two- despite the fact that he's younger, and he's the brother of the finacee.
So often it's too hard not to pity the character in that position in these kinds of stories.

Anyway- verra good, m'dear.
The only crticism i'd have was that a few wrods could be edited to make a more cohesive kind of flow- give a rhythm to some of your similies. But that's just a style of writing i like.
So, yes, i very much enjoyed this.
Cheers !
- Sy

Enjoyed this story immensely. Great characters. I was especially drawn to the forward Nicholas. Good sex scene because it wasn't perfect but somewhat awkward as a first time under those circumstances would be. Good details. My only complaint - it ended too soon. This would be a great first chapter for a longer piece as there is a lot of potential conflict in the setup.