At first I was a little confused when you said, "you." I was like, "Is this first or second person?" And the "I'm in love with my step-sibling" is one of my favourite story lines :p There's lots of points where you forget to put spaces after commas, but screw the commas. The story was lovely :3 And I'll try to stay away from your older stories, but I can't promise anything :]

This is lovely! The story flows so well. I really like the point of view you chose, it fits so well with the story. I feel like the relationship between the two boys is so natural, and I like the way you just ease into it. Naturally, with the situation they find themselves in, they would turn to each other. I only wish it were longer!

Loved the ending on this, it is so open :D

Very interesting concept... I wonder, would they finally settle down? Or continue moving around? Or would they return later that night because they have no money? lol

Awesome story!

Very lovely. I loved the ending. Perfect and not too cheesy. It was sad but...sweet. :D Nice work.

I like the disconnected or disjointed mood that you create, it reflects the story well.
Good description," But after it, when my hand is still gripping, and my breathing is still ragged, I cry in anger, feeling gross all over."

Aw, I loved it! It was such a touching story.. haha that seems like sarcasm or something but it's not, I really did like it XD

:( NOT ENOUGH ACTION FOR ME THOUGH


Lately I just keep wanting to read raunchy sex scenes... m.. delicious.. *cough* XD

Great one-shot - shame it's just that!

HEY. SERIALXLAIN. THAT'S ME! xD


Some favorite lines...things...:
but the only thing I know is that last time it was a lot easier to note how you had arranged your furniture instead of gazing at your face and wishing you weren’t here.

You’re staring at me, waiting for an answer, but that wasn’t a question and that’s not how it works.


AND I loved it. :D Thanks so much. Nice job getting in the requirements. :3 lol

I liked the "you" instead of the normal, usual stuff. A nice style. And I really liked the narrator. :) A very pretty story.

Yay.
Thanks.
xo

Cute and bittersweet. I liked it ^_^ And the writing style was interesting, too.

Had to say it in a review: this is definitely one of your best. :) Way to go, Maga!