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wreckless.and.jealous 2008-07-24 ch 2,	abuseI prefer the scond one... I don't know why. I think it has something to do with the small little blocks of words you give so it's understandable and easily readable. I also love the infatuation that that person has for the other person. Partially because I have a little infatuation too, but let's not get into that. Hehe. Anyway... I love the poem, and hope you write more like this. -wreckless.and.jealous
Mercyette 2008-06-04 ch 1,	abuseHere is your review, oh wonderful first place contestant of the Review Marathon! envious glare XD What I liked most about this poem is that you paint a vivid picture of how the person feels about the other, of how she stays with him, despite her obvious pain. It really gives life into your poem. I have to comment that your summary was good for this as well. It helped snag my attention out of counts on fingers A LOT of works. ;) The only thing I can give as far as con crit goes is that it seemed like we only got to hear half of the story in the poem. I know poems aren't typically supposed to go into great detail, but I would have liked to know why his love hurts her so much. Either way it was a nice poem. Great work!
Samantha Marie Haven 2008-03-25 ch 2,	abuseheey, you won the marathon so i will review!! :) nice piece you've got here. it's not real long, but length hardly matters when the poem itself has substance. which yours thankfully does. it's a bit of a haunting poem--at least that's how i read it--so if that was your intention, good job on getting that across!! if not...well, it worked out great either way. i love the second stanza, when you mix opposites...i guess you could call it an oxymoron...it's some form of that. but yeah, realy great use of comparing opposites, it's definitely the most effective part. if there was something negative to say, i'd just let you know that it seems a little simplistic. that's not really a bad thing, because the simple ones aren't terrible, but i felt that there was little to really feel. it's not something exquisite that appeals to me personally, but it's really not bad at all. definietely keep writing, though! i think if you really feel the stuff you write, it'll shine. :) and that concludes review number one from me.
Takhisis 2008-03-24 ch 1,	abusei like the first part of this poem. Its very poetic. I don't like the second part of the poem. It doesn't make sense. Now the third part... Wonderful ending!
kloun doll 2008-03-22 ch 1,	abuseI like the metaphor from the first verse, I think it's true we don't own some things. the verse 2 is pretty sweet and the last verse to be honest I think it's not fix at all.
SickButPretty 2008-02-23 ch 1,	abuseThis is my favourite one so far. You definitely evoke how much power a person you love can have over you, and how often they tend to abuse that power. My favourite line is, "My freedom and my chain."
Sexy vampirechick 2008-02-16 ch 1,	abuseI love this piece.It's a wonderful poem...to tell you the truth I prefer the first draft over the edited one...hmm maybe it's just me :) Keep writing!
HauntedMisery 2008-02-04 ch 1,	abuseah, I love this, all your pieces are wonderful =]
reiphil 2008-02-04 ch 1,	abuseoh wow. I know these feelings exactly. Great poem, these are the feelings I always feel. Every second of every day. The whole drug aspect, neediness, yearning to be loved aspect. Hmmph. I know it all too well.
Camilleta 2008-01-28 ch 1,	abuseI like the first one better but both are good.
lookin4nemo 2008-01-18 ch 1,	abuseThis is my favorite one of all the ones you have written! this is great and keep it up
XxXKristie marieXxX 2008-01-14 ch 1,	abuseSounds like she will be. She makes you happy and sad. Definitly no that feeling. Good work. Best of luck to you both ^_^
Lurid Black 2008-01-10 ch 1,	abuseSweet, you've made it seem like this persons care is vital to your own health- extremely well written. Keep at it!
tearing hands 2008-01-08 ch 2,	abuseI think I like the first one better because the and's in the middle stanza emphasize the contrast between each pair of words and also make the lines a little longer, which makes the rhythm flow better. Good job!
Julius Gillian 2008-01-03 ch 2,	abuseNow this is a beautiful piece, congrats.

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