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| Faith Adeline 2008-01-17 ch 11,  | abusevery, very good piece. I throughly enjoyed it. Truly wonderful. The images the poem brings forth is great. Keep it up! Faith |
| Faith Adeline 2008-01-11 ch 10, | abusegood chapter, although I could never forgive a cheater. Just me. Keep up the good work! Faith |
| Emilyne Willowar 2008-01-11 ch 5, | abuseI love these, tragic and beautiful at the same time. Keep it up! |
| Faith Adeline 2008-01-08 ch 9, | abuseI like this. Very good. I would say they're apart. But that's just me. Keep it up! Faith |
| Faith Adeline 2008-01-04 ch 8, | abuseYeah the ending is a bit confusing. But the poem is very very good. One of my favorites in this collection so far. For the ending, what I would do is something like, " And with the dagger we can pierce our innocence" or something like that. I would make the ending something with the knife. Just my opinion. Keep it up! Faith |
| Faith Adeline 2008-01-03 ch 7, | abusevery cool. I think the 7th part is the most strongest. The paragraph right before the end. I liked it. Keep it up! Faith |
| Faith Adeline 2008-01-01 ch 6, | abuseI liked this one. My favorite line was ( I could've sworn he played for me). It just really popped out. Lifehouse is a good band, I like a couple of their songs. Keep up the good work, and update soon!! Faith btw, I've updated some things on my site also. Just wanted to let you know. :) |
| Faith Adeline 2007-12-31 ch 5, | abusegood job with this. I like it. Can't wait for more of your works!! Faith |
| Faith Adeline 2007-12-31 ch 4, | abuselol I'd be honored to be your beta. I liked this poem, very good. The only thing I would do is put the first two lines in quotes, because she's saying them. That's all. Keep up the good work! Faith |
| Faith Adeline 2007-12-28 ch 3, | abuseI liked this. It's nice to see you step outside of your comfort zone and write something like this. I throughly enjoyed it. Wonderful job. Faith |
| Faith Adeline 2007-12-27 ch 2, | abuseyeah this was different than what you usually write, but I liked it. It was. . . just different, but good. lol. I hope it turns into another collection, because I love reading your poems. Keep up the amazing work. Faith |